哈佛大学录取文书范例分析！原来这些文书要素很重要！

想要写出一篇优秀的文书，绝非一蹴而就的事情。相信每位经历过申请季的申请党们一定都有体会过炼狱般的文书修改过程，彻底完成一篇文书的时间有时甚至高达一两个月。语言流畅度、逻辑清晰度、层次分明度，语法有无错误、内容是否过于直白或涉及敏感问题……每个点都需要仔细打磨和反复推敲。

文书是否出彩，是否能够打动招生官，是学生最终收获梦校录取的关键之一。一篇优秀的文书有时能够在标化成绩不理想的情况下，让招生官看到申请者在其他方面的潜能，助你逆风翻盘。什么才是优秀的文书呢？与其泛泛地查询各种文书方法论，不如直接来看美国大学官方的真实范例。

23-24申请季业已开始，与新一年文书题目公开的同时还有各大名校范文的更新。近期，最新一年的十篇哈佛范文公布，其中优秀文书原文和文书点评都在网站上向读者公开。

本期，我们就给大家精选出22-23Fall哈佛录取生的优秀文书的其中三篇，举例构成优秀文书的那些Key elements。

哈佛范文

"Hook+Anchor+Story+Growth"

第一篇范文展示了成功文书的必备公式：Hook+Anchor+Story+Growth，那么这一公式的意涵何在，以及这一公式怎样将作者的整体性显示给招生官，请沉浸到原文中看看吧！

哈佛大学录取文书原文

With the blazing morning sun beaming through the window, I had an inclination to make a stand to sell Lebanese laymounada - a light lemonade flavored with a splash of rosewater. Throughout my childhood, anytime the temperature spiked over seventy degrees, there would be laymounada waiting for me at my Teta’s (grandmother in Lebanese Arabic) house.

At that moment, I scoured the cabinets and secured the glass pitcher only to realize we did not have lemons. To my disappointment, I realized my days of being an entrepreneur and generating revenue from my laymounada stand were over before they could even begin. I sat at the kitchen table, wallowing in disappointment. I wanted everyone to be able to taste my Teta’s laymounada. Suddenly, I had an idea that would either prove to be inventive or a total failure. I would sell lemonade without the lemons. Revolutionary, right?

I ripped off a rectangular sheet of paper towel and jotted down my business plan. I listed the key elements of the business plan: a drawing of a cup, a rose, and the price- “fifty scents”- to correlate with the rose-themed business. I sat outside of my childhood home located in a cul-de-sac of five houses and sold my neighbors a rose drink- a combination of filtered water, packets of sugar, and a dash of rosewater. Granted, I only made about $10 from a combination of my parents and generous neighbors who did not drink the “lemonade”, but the experience allowed me to realize regardless of the obstacle, if you are passionate, you can persevere. Teta’s laymounada was my introduction to entrepreneurship.

The entrepreneurial skills gained from my laymounada stand allowed me to establish A&G Jewelry, co-founded with my sister when I was twelve. This business focused on representing our Lebanese heritage. Using supplies we found around our house and from our local craft store, we created a variety of pieces that featured traditional Middle Eastern coins, beads, and clay baked into the shape of Lebanon. My sister and I collaborated to create marketing tools to promote our new business. Before we knew it, A&G Jewelry had earned a spot at my church’s annual Lebanese festival. After tirelessly marketing and selling our jewelry for three days straight, we had made over $900 in revenue, which we decided to donate to the church.
Entrepreneurship took a new form in high school when my sister and I founded our second partnership, The Model Brockton City Council. We saw a need to engage our peers in local government by designing a simulation of our city council. We had to collect signatures, present to many administrators, and market our new club. The initial goal to have more people try my lemonade resonated with me as I strived to have more people engage in their civic duties. Today, over twenty-five of my classmates frequently attend my meetings.

With my first business venture selling laymounada, I made $10; with A&G Jewelry, $900; with the Model Brockton City Council, the revenue amounted to $0. Although there was not a financial gain, I attained experience as a negotiator, problem solver, creative thinker, and most importantly, I became persistent.

Twelve years have passed since that summer day with my “laymounada,” and I have yet to maintain a long-lasting business. My six-year-old self would have seen this lack of continuity as a colossal failure, but instead, it instilled an intense curiosity in me. Little did I know the experience would remain so vivid after all these years. It has continued to push me, compelling me to challenge myself both academically and entrepreneurially. As I grow older, my intrinsic drive to have a lemonade stand, regardless of whatever obstacles come my way, persists as a deep-seated love of business.

When life doesn’t give you lemons, still make lemonade (or laymounada, as my Teta would say).

范文参考译文

清晨，炽热的阳光透过窗户洒在我的身上，我不由自主地想摆摊卖黎巴嫩的 laymounada（一种加了玫瑰水的淡柠檬水）。在我的童年时代，只要气温超过七十度，我的特塔（黎巴嫩阿拉伯语中的祖母）家就会有 laymounada 等着我。

那一刻，我翻遍了橱柜，找到了玻璃水壶，却发现我们家没有柠檬。令我失望的是，我意识到我想成为一名企业家并从我的 laymounada 摊位上创收的日子还没开始就已经结束了。我坐在厨房的桌子旁，沉浸在失望之中。我希望每个人都能品尝到我的 Teta's laymounada。突然，我有了一个想法，这个想法要么被证明是别出心裁，要么被证明是彻底失败。我要卖没有柠檬的柠檬水。很革命吧？

我撕下一张长方形纸巾，记下了我的商业计划。我列出了商业计划书的关键要素：一个杯子的图画、一朵玫瑰，以及价格--"50 种香味"--与玫瑰主题的业务相关联。我坐在儿时的家门口，那里有五栋房子，我向邻居们推销玫瑰饮料--过滤水、糖包和少许玫瑰水的组合。当然，我只从父母和慷慨的邻居那里赚了大约 10 美元，他们都没有喝 "柠檬水"，但这次经历让我意识到，无论遇到什么困难，只要有热情，就能坚持下去。Teta 的 laymounada 是我的创业入门。

从 laymounada 摊位上获得的创业技能让我在 12 岁时与姐姐共同创办了 A&G 珠宝公司。这项业务的重点是体现我们的黎巴嫩传统。我们利用从家里和当地手工艺品商店淘来的材料，制作了各种以中东传统硬币、珠子和烤成黎巴嫩形状的粘土为特色的饰品。我和妹妹合作制作了营销工具，以推广我们的新业务。在我们意识到这一点之前，A&G 珠宝已经在我教会一年一度的黎巴嫩节上赢得了一席之地。经过连续三天不懈的营销和销售，我们的珠宝收入超过了 900 美元，我们决定将这笔钱捐给教会。

高中时，我和妹妹创建了我们的第二家合伙企业--布罗克顿市模范议会（The Model Brockton City Council），创业精神由此焕然一新。我们认为有必要通过设计一个模拟市议会，让我们的同龄人参与到地方政府中来。我们必须收集签名，向许多行政人员介绍，并推销我们的新俱乐部。最初的目标是让更多的人尝尝我的柠檬水，这引起了我的共鸣，我努力让更多的人参与到公民义务中来。如今，我的二十五位同学经常参加我的会议。

第一次创业卖 laymounada，我赚了 10 美元；A&G 珠宝店赚了 900 美元；布罗克顿市模范议会的收入为 0 美元。虽然没有经济收益，但我获得了谈判者、问题解决者、创造性思维者的经验，最重要的是，我变得坚持不懈。

自从那个夏日和我的 "laymounada "在一起后，12 年过去了，我还没有维持长久的生意。六岁时的我可能会把这种缺乏持续性视为巨大的失败，但这反而激发了我强烈的好奇心。我不知道这段经历会在这么多年后依然如此生动。它不断鞭策着我，迫使我在学业和创业方面不断挑战自己。随着年龄的增长，无论遇到什么困难，我都会坚持开一个柠檬水摊，这是我对商业根深蒂固的热爱。

当生活没有给你柠檬时，仍然要做柠檬水（或者用我的泰塔的话说，做柠檬水）。

专业点评

许多成功的大学作文都遵循一个简单的公式：Hook+Anchor+Story+Growth（钩子+锚点+故事+成长）。虽然具体内容可能各不相同，但如果你能包含这四个要素中的每一个，你就能写出一篇引人注目的文章。

钩子：“钩子”的作用是吸引读者。招生官每天要阅读成百上千篇文章，因此要努力在第一时间抓住他们的注意力，用一些引人入胜或与众不同的内容作为文章的开头。

Georgina的“钩子”就是她的“laymounada”摊位。黎巴嫩的laymounada（用玫瑰水调味的淡柠檬水）有什么特别之处？它与普通柠檬水有什么不同？而谁又是Teta？乔治娜用她对经典柠檬水摊故事的文化诠释，激发了读者的好奇心。

锚：“锚”是连接整篇文章、赋予其意义的观点或主题。一个好的“锚”可以发人深省，让读者在读完文章后感到满意。

Georgina的“锚”是生活没有给她柠檬。她在家里找不到一个柠檬，于是她不得不发挥创意，卖起了不含柠檬的laymounada。这次经历让她学会了坚忍不拔的精神，并由此开始了一连串的创业。最后，文章又回到了这个锚点，将一切串联起来：“当生活没有给你柠檬的时候，还是要做柠檬水（或者祖母Teta会说的laymounada）”。

故事：说到讲故事，黄金法则是“show, don’t tell.（展示，而不是讲述）”。不要只告诉招生官你是一个多么优秀的人。相反，要试着通过你的故事向他们展示你的个性、品格和成就。

在Georgina的故事中，她分享了让她难忘的柠檬水摊经历的所有丰富多彩的细节。例如，她在故事中加入了一些有趣的细节，比如为了迎合玫瑰花的主题，她将自己的饮料定价为“五十种香味”。她还开玩笑说，她赚到的10美元主要来自于支持她的父母和慷慨的邻居，他们甚至懒得喝 “lemonade”。

这些细节描绘了Georgina有趣、富有创造力和进取心的形象，同时也展现了她的谦逊。她还很好地融入了自己如何为社区带来影响的动力：“在连续三天不知疲倦地推销和销售我们的珠宝之后，我们的收入超过了900美元，我们决定把这笔钱捐给教堂”。

成长：所有优秀的大学申请文书都会清楚地展示你是如何从自己的经历中成长起来的。一定要突出你从自己的经历中学到了什么或收获了什么。

例如，Georgina了解到，她在创业过程中缺乏连续性并不是“巨大的失败”。相反，这培养了她的好奇心、坚持能力和对商业的热爱。在文章的最后，Georgina显然是一个（对商业）充满热情的人，她有开辟自己道路的经历。她能够从每一次经历中吸取经验教训，并将其运用到下一次的事业中。

Georgina抓住了所有四个关键要素--Hook+Anchor+Story+Growth--这就是这篇文章成功的原因。

"Well-structured"

第二篇范文告诉了我们文书结构的重要性，在具备相应的关键要素后，怎样合理安排文书的行进也是行文中需要深思熟虑的部分。下面这篇范文很好地展示了文书中的合理结构会是怎样的。

哈佛大学录取文书原文

There’s a theory that even though each color has a specific wavelength that never changes, how people perceive a specific color may have subtle differences based on small differences in photoreceptors, and the color that one person might consider red might still be red in another’s mind but could look different— a little duller, softer, cooler. Furthermore, how a person’s brain processes the color may also be linked to that person’s environment. Some studies have suggested that color sensitivity could be linked to one’s native languages: for example, people who speak languages that have specific names for eleven colors are able to easily distinguish those eleven colors, but people who speak languages with fewer color specific words may have a harder time distinguishing them.

So it appears that even at the most elementary level of sight, the world is not an objective thing. Instead, what we know and what we remember can influence what and how we see. The color blue may just be the color blue to a three year old, perhaps her favorite color even, but an adult might connect it to so much more—the lake by his childhood home or the eye color of a loved one.

I first consciously became aware of the power that our experiences have to change perception when I went to turn on a light in my house after learning about photons in class. What had previously been a mundane light suddenly became a fascinating application of atomic structure, and I thought that I could almost perceive the electrons jumping up and down from energy level to energy level to produce the photons that I saw. I then realized that my world had steadily been changing throughout my years in school as I learned more and more. I now see oligopolies in the soda aisles of the supermarkets. I see the charges warring with each other in every strike of lightning, and the patterns of old American politics still swaying things today. Knowledge and making connections with that knowledge is the difference between seeing the seven oceans glittering in the sun and merely seeing the color blue. It’s the difference between just seeing red and seeing the scarlet of roses blooming, the burgundy of blood pumping through veins, and crimson of anger so fierce that you could burst. Knowledge is color; it is depth, and it is seeing a whole new world without having to move an inch.

It is knowledge, too, that can bring people together. I love listening to people’s stories and hearing about what they know and love, because if I learn about what they know, I can learn how they see the world; consequently, since behavior is often based upon perception, I can understand why a person behaves the way they do. On a road trip during the summer, my mom kept looking up at the streetlights lining the highways. When I asked why, she told me that whenever she saw lights by a highway she would wonder if her company had made them. She would guess how tall they were, how wide, and what style they were. She told me that ever since she started working for her company, lights no longer were just lights to her. They were a story of people who first had to measure the wind speed to figure out what dimension the lights had to be, and then of engineers, of money passing hands—possibly even under her own supervision as an accountant—and then of transportation, and of the people who had to install them. I might never perceive lights the exact way my mother does or see her “red” but by hearing her describe what she knows, I can understand her world and realize her role in ours.
Beauty and color are in the world, but it is seeking the unknown and making new connections that unlocks them from their greyscale cage.

范文参考译文

有一种理论认为，尽管每种颜色都有特定的波长，而且这种波长永远不会改变，但人们对特定颜色的感知可能会因感光器的细微差别而产生微妙的差异。此外，一个人的大脑如何处理颜色也可能与他所处的环境有关。一些研究表明，对颜色的敏感度可能与一个人的母语有关：例如，使用有 11 种颜色特定名称的语言的人能够很容易地分辨出这 11 种颜色，但使用颜色特定词汇较少的语言的人可能较难分辨出这些颜色。

由此看来，即使在最初级的视觉层面，世界也不是客观存在的。相反，我们的知识和记忆会影响我们看到什么以及如何看到。对于一个三岁的孩子来说，蓝色可能只是蓝色，甚至可能是她最喜欢的颜色，但对于一个成年人来说，蓝色可能与更多的东西联系在一起--他儿时家附近的湖泊，或者是他所爱的人眼睛的颜色。

当我在课堂上学习了光子的知识后，去打开家里的一盏灯时，我第一次有意识地意识到，我们的经历具有改变感知的力量。我想，我几乎可以感知到电子在能级之间上下跳跃，从而产生我所看到的光子。然后我意识到，随着我学到的知识越来越多，我的世界在我的求学生涯中一直在稳步变化。现在，我在超市的汽水货架上看到了寡头垄断。

我看到每一道闪电中的电荷都在相互交战，旧美国政治的模式至今仍在左右着一切。知识与知识之间的联系，是看到七大洋在阳光下闪闪发光与仅仅看到蓝色之间的区别。这是只看到红色与看到玫瑰绽放的猩红、血管中血液流动的酒红、愤怒到让人爆裂的深红之间的区别。知识就是色彩，知识就是深度，知识就是不需要移动一寸，就能看到一个全新的世界。

知识还能将人们团结在一起。我喜欢听别人讲故事，听他们讲述自己的所知所爱，因为如果我了解了他们的所知所爱，我就能知道他们是如何看待这个世界的。在暑假的一次公路旅行中，我妈妈一直抬头看着公路两旁的路灯。当我问起原因时，她告诉我，每当她看到公路旁的路灯时，她就会想这些路灯是不是她的公司制造的。她会猜这些路灯有多高，有多宽，是什么款式。

她告诉我，自从她开始在自己的公司工作后，灯对她来说就不再只是灯了。对她来说，电灯不再只是电灯，而是一个故事：首先，人们要测量风速，以确定电灯的尺寸；然后，工程师们要测量风速，以确定电灯的尺寸；最后，钱要转手--甚至可能是在她作为会计的监督下转手--然后是运输，以及安装电灯的人。我可能永远无法像母亲那样准确地感知灯光，也无法看到她的 "红色"，但通过听她描述她所知道的一切，我可以理解她的世界，并认识到她在我们世界中的作用。

美和色彩就在这个世界上，但只有寻求未知，建立新的联系，才能将它们从灰暗的牢笼中解救出来。

专业点评

Amy以“求知欲”为中心，用生动的描述性语言，将引人入胜的科学理论、色彩研究和视觉联系起来，展示了有限/广博的知识如何塑造我们的现实和经历，从而写出了一篇引人注目、发人深省的文章。

整篇文章体现了Amy不断学习的热情和成长，她将自己的知识与周围环境联系起来，寻找隐藏的真理。一个人可以通过了解他人的知识或故事来理解他人的行为或感知，这是一个简单而深刻的宏观主题--对知识、真理、分享想法和经验的好奇心无疑可以将许多人聚集在一起。这让我想起了狭义相对论和广义相对论的发现者阿尔伯特-爱因斯坦的著名自白："我没有什么特殊才能。我只有强烈的好奇心"。

这篇文章的结构非常合理，每一段都进一步阐明了Amy对新信息和联系的渴望。

1-2段中，她首先介绍了一个引人入胜的科学背景，即尽管颜色具有特定的波长，但对于两个人来说，会说的语言不同，视觉效果也会不同。这很吸引人，我想读下去！她天衣无缝地将有关色彩的理论和研究结合在一起，从而推断出我们的世界并不是一个放之四海而皆准的旅程，我们各自的教育和经历会改变我们的所见所闻。

在第 3 段中，艾米展示了她的第一个“A-ha”时刻，她意识到并形象地描述了她在课堂上学到的光子粒子从她的“平凡之光”中发出的真正科学过程！她的大脑像海绵一样，在不断成长的世界中吸收着新的数据流，开始将日常活动与经济、自然现象和政治等大局观念联系起来。这一点阐述得非常清楚！

第 4 段是实打实的gamechanger。她的“从教育到社会理解”的口号进一步启示我们：教育、开放的心态以及了解他人的故事和经历的确可以在看似不同的世界之间架起桥梁。Amy最后以自己的母亲对高速公路路灯的认识为例，说明任何人都可以将自己的知识、经验与环境联系起来。最后，Amy以自己的人生智慧和对“寻找未知，建立联系”的清晰反思作为结尾，结束了文书。

总之，Amy得出了一个有力的结论：教育、同理心、倾听、理解和联系，都是她对生活充满激情的动力。艾米说她渴望了解万事万物，尤其是人，她把自己描绘成一个充满好奇心、讨人喜欢的学生--是一个充满活力的学术团体的理想成员。

"Aisle Essay"

当你面对空白文档时，脑袋里蹦出了一万个非写不可的故事或思路，你要怎样将它们串联起来？第三篇范文给出了一个解法，“aisle essay”这一方法可以将小标题们串联起来，使得文章统一且合乎逻辑。

哈佛大学录取文书原文

Barreling through the hallowed, mahogany double doors, I was on a mission. I made a beeline for the back. Behold, a panoply of new prospects, each beckoning me to read them.

Every weekend, my father, my sister, and I make the pilgrimage to Book Mecca. The sensations one meets upon entering Barnes and Noble are unmatched. The aroma of coffee mingles with the crisp perfume of unopened books, and the tinny music drifts from the ceiling speakers, coalescing with the clanking of the Cafe equipment, which is intermittently overcome by the barista's peppy voice on the PA system announcing the latest limited-edition dessert. Where else can one enjoy a triple-layer cheesecake among bookstacks? As Virginia Woolf says, "one cannot think well, love well, sleep well, if one has not dined well."

My family, however, dines on knowledge. To us, Barnes and Noble is an all-you-can-eat buffet for the mind. After we snag our favorite corner table, I sit, like metal to a magnet, immovable for hours.

I may delve into an Agatha Christie novel and attempt to outwit Detective Poirot; though I never win, I find the sleuthing remarkably similar to analyzing confounders the culprits of unexpected results-in my clinical research. Alternatively, I may crack open an atlas to test my memory from the summer when I memorized the entire world map. Or, I might read Animal Farm to better understand the system that ravaged Ethiopia in the late 20th century and forced my grandfather to flee his own village.

Complimenting this mission to satisfy our voracious minds comes an equally important fulfillment: engaging with the coterie of miscellaneous characters we have befriended. After visiting the same Barnes and Noble for eleven years, we have forged friendships with several regulars, including a retired teacher couple, an octogenarian with a seven-year-old brother, and an eternally sunburned man named George who shelters feral cats at his pool company's office. After a dear Barnes and Noble-goer passed away, my heart was comforted when I read in her obituary that she, indeed, would be missed by "the old [bookstore] gang." United by their good humor and love for Barnes and Noble, this unlikely group teaches me that a community can form around anything, no matter how disparate the members are. They show me that, in Aristotle's words, "educating the mind without educating the heart is no education at all."

While I have the luxury of Barnes and Noble, my father's reality growing up in rural Ethiopia bears a stark contrast and defines my legacy of education. He received a meager education in a laughable schoolhouse, using sunlight to study by day, and the moonlight by night. When he was nine, my grandfather opened a school so my father could continue beyond 4th grade, unlike many of his peers. My grandfather had no formal education, yet he knew the country's constitution by heart and exhorted nearby villages to educate their children.

My father's dedication to chauffeuring me to the bookstore and the library is an artifact of his father's same dedication. And I am the accumulation of this legacy. Behind me are all of the sacrifices and payoffs of my family's dedication to education, and before me is a lifetime of opportunity and fulfillment. Though I have never met my grandfather, I feel an incredibly palpable connection to him through our shared fervor to learn and teach. My father's and grandfather's stories remind me that education is not a commodity for many, but a privilege that I treat as such. I cherish all of my education's wonderful consequences: the obscure curiosities I have indulged in, the strong sense of identity I have developed, the discernment and morals I have bolstered, the respect I have gained for different viewpoints, and the ambition for excellence that I have inherited and extended. They are what fuel me, my college education, and my drive to pay it forward.

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冲进神圣的红木双门，我就有了使命感。我径直向后面走去。看啊，一排排新书，每一本都在向我招手，让我读一读。

每个周末，父亲、姐姐和我都会去图书圣地朝圣。一走进巴诺书店，就会有无与伦比的感觉。咖啡的香气与未开封书籍的清香交织在一起，天花板上的扬声器里飘出刺耳的音乐，与咖啡馆设备的叮当声汇合在一起，间或还有咖啡师在扩音系统中播报最新限量版甜点的欢快声音。还有什么地方能在书架间品尝到三层芝士蛋糕呢？正如弗吉尼亚-伍尔夫（Virginia Woolf）所说，"如果一个人没有好好用餐，就无法好好思考、好好恋爱、好好睡觉"。

然而，我的家人却以知识为餐。对我们来说，巴诺书店就是一个任你享用的心灵自助餐厅。在我们抢到最喜欢的角落桌子后，我就坐在那里，就像磁铁吸住了金属，几个小时纹丝不动。
我可能会钻进阿加莎-克里斯蒂的小说里，试图智取波洛侦探；虽然我从来没有赢过，但我发现这种探案方式与我在临床研究中分析混淆因素（造成意外结果的罪魁祸首）的方式非常相似。或者，我也会打开一本地图册，测试一下自己的记忆力，那个夏天我背下了整个世界地图。或者，我可能会阅读《动物农场》，以便更好地理解 20 世纪末肆虐埃塞俄比亚、迫使我祖父逃离自己村庄的制度。

除了满足我们贪婪的欲望，还有一个同样重要的成就感：与我们结交的小圈子里的各种人物打交道。十一年来，我们一直光顾同一家巴诺书店，与几位常客建立了友谊，其中包括一对退休教师夫妇、一位带着一个七岁弟弟的八旬老人，以及一位永远晒不黑的名叫乔治的男子，他在泳池公司的办公室里收容野猫。一位亲爱的巴诺书店顾客去世后，当我在她的讣告中读到 "老（书店）帮 "会怀念她时，我的心得到了安慰。他们的幽默和对《巴恩斯与诺布尔》的热爱将这个不太可能的团体团结在一起，他们告诉我，无论成员之间有多大的差异，任何事情都可以形成一个团体。他们告诉我，用亚里士多德的话说，"没有心灵教育的思想教育根本不是教育"。

虽然我拥有豪华的巴诺书店，但我父亲在埃塞俄比亚农村长大的现实却形成了鲜明的对比，也决定了我的教育遗产。他在一个可笑的校舍里接受了微薄的教育，白天利用阳光学习，晚上利用月光学习。父亲九岁时，我的祖父开办了一所学校，这样父亲就能继续读完四年级，这与许多同龄人不同。我的祖父没有受过正规教育，但他对国家宪法了如指掌，并劝说附近的村庄让他们的孩子接受教育。

我父亲开车接送我去书店和图书馆，这也是他父亲奉献精神的体现。而我就是这份遗产的积累。在我的身后，是我的家庭为教育所付出的所有牺牲和回报，而在我的面前，则是一生的机遇和成就。虽然我从未见过我的祖父，但通过我们对学习和教学的共同热忱，我感到了与他之间令人难以置信的联系。父亲和祖父的故事提醒我，教育对许多人来说不是商品，而是我的特权。我珍惜教育所带来的一切美好结果：我沉迷于晦涩难懂的好奇心，我培养了强烈的身份认同感，我增强了辨别力和道德感，我获得了对不同观点的尊重，我继承并扩展了追求卓越的雄心壮志。它们是我的动力，是我的大学教育，也是我回报社会的动力。

专业点评

Abby的文章非常出色。以下是她的做法，以及你也可以这样做的方法：

Abby使用了一种我称之为“aisle essay（过道式文书）”的方法。想象一下，推着购物车穿过杂货店，挑选自己喜欢的食物并将它们放在购物车里。

在“aisle essay”中，作者推着一辆谚语式的购物车走过她的过去、现在和未来，一路上收集她的轶事、兴趣和价值观。将购物车视为文章的背景，Abby的购物车就是Barnes & Noble（巴诺书店）。

这个坚定的背景将文章置于一个易于描绘的世界中，让Abby可以深入到她生活的不同层面，而不会让文章显得散乱。只要在购物车中找到文章中的每个小标题，文章就会读起来像一篇统一的、合乎逻辑的文章。

在Abby的例子中，她利用图书馆的书籍和咖啡馆巧妙地转向她的个人叙事。侦探小说让人想起她的“临床研究”。提到《动物农场》，她就会提起祖父的非凡故事。通过描述她在咖啡馆形成的古怪社区，艾比向我们展示了她是一个善于与人沟通的人，她因与人交往而兴奋，并被她所遇到的人铭记。因此，虽然这篇文章发生在巴诺书店，但这并不是它的主题，巴诺书店只是向我们讲述Abby的一个舞台。

Abby在文章的最后明确提出了她的核心价值观：感恩。她没有夸大其词，夸张地宣称她将改变或拯救世界。相反，她只是向我们展示了一个真实的自己：一个经常光顾书店的充满好奇心的女孩--一个从自己的过去中汲取灵感，在未来的红木大门中奋力前行的人。

你能想到一个属于你的典型环境吗？在你的aisle essay中，你会从书架上抓住哪些兴趣和价值观？

关于文书写作技巧

由于篇幅有限，本期我们暂时分享以上三篇，而这三篇文书也相应展示了文书写作中常用但关键的技巧方法。

选择合适的技巧方法会使得你的文书出奇制胜，同时也可以使你尽可能在招生官面前展示你同一的自我。

另外也请记住，真正意义上的写作一直都应该是以人为本的写作，动笔写作前，请先反思好自己到底是谁，为什么你之所以为你。