“Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Primary school students (aged 5-10) should do no more than 30 minutes of homework per night because they already get enough instructions at school during the day.”
【思路】 “够了”。因为:
一、孩子的脑子应付不了太多功课;
二、不能让作业打击孩子的学习兴趣和意愿;
三、老师也应付不来那么多要批改的作业吧。
Introduction
1、 我在讨论什么(论题)。
2、 我在这个论题中的立场是什么。
达到这两个目的就好,不要冗长拖沓。
Although homework is necessary as it is to make sure that child students revisit things taught in the class, the load should be within a small amount. The proposition that the amount should not exceed 30 minutes of work is logical and adoptable.First, a child’s mind is unable to deal with homework that takes a long time.
[接下来,要么会解释,要么会举例,要么同时解释和举例。如果同时解释和举例,没有绝对先后顺序。就这个点而言,用解释去论证更佳。]
Children usually have short attention spans. If the assignments require a long span of focus, children will get absent-minded and, as a result, learn nothing. In addition, although children may be forced to concentrate and manage to do so, they will get tired, and fatigue does not promote learning and instead inhibits it.
[接下来举例子么?其实可以不举例,因为解释够清楚了。]
Homework is not to make children suffer but to encourage children to experience what they learn. If the load is heavy and the time is lengthy, child students’ interest in learning and patience will wear thin and eventually wear off. For instance,
[完全可以讲述个人经历,别编纂Tom还是Jerry。]
when I was in the elementary school, the math teacher always assigned too much homework to the students. As a matter of fact, the large amounts were not useful in strengthening my numeracy skills but counterproductive. Doing the work was like a torture, and with my interest in the subject lost soon, I failed in math. In fact, I have since been weak in counting and calculating
【第三点,此处略。我们换用互动的方式来:有心的读者可以把自己的写作尝试发在留言区,作者会去给出评价。】
There is no denying that homework is necessary because child students need to reflect on their learning—the successes and deficiencies—during the day. However, the amount must be reasonable and small, and the length of 30 minutes may be just fine.
Conclusion可以是introduction的改写。
不要过分重复主体部分已经陈述到很清楚细致的内容。
总的说来,避免冗长拖沓。
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